Forum: Poetry For Review  05-17-2006, 02:20 PM |
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| Forum: Poetry For Review 05-03-2006, 03:04 PM |
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 Make Him Hers---> opinions?
He told her he liked her
He told her he loved her
He told her he hated her
He told her he hated loving her
But she already knew the truth...
She blew him kisses
She told him she knew what he...
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| Forum: Poetry For Review 05-03-2006, 02:59 PM |
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Question Y'guys...
Does anybody here have any inspiration from certain poets or authors??
(just me being nosey)
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| Forum: Poetry For Review 05-03-2006, 02:56 PM |
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 that was actually REALLY good. i liked how the...
that was actually REALLY good. i liked how the lines were short, it just emphasized the feeling of emptiness. and you sort of have meter, though if it was on purpose or not, i'm not sure, because...
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| Forum: Poetry For Review 04-10-2006, 08:19 PM |
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Small Town Girl
Doomed to cause pain
Forced to see the light
I'm nothing but another fat chick
Hanging behind those blue eyed models
Yeah, perhaps I'm insane
But everything's crazy cool
From my point of view
But...
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| Forum: Poetry For Review 03-30-2006, 09:29 AM |
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 well, let me start off by saying that this poem...
well, let me start off by saying that this poem is actually REALLY good. i loved line 13, "regretting every moment, forgetting every hour, wishing every minute...were a little different." that was...
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| Forum: Poetry For Review 03-28-2006, 02:09 PM |
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Stripped of Vanity
This is just a poem about...well, you'll see. Just wondering if y'all have any critiques.
A heedless smile
Held in the pure
Solace of terror
Forced beyond miles
A colorless
World held in the sky
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| Forum: Poetry For Review 03-28-2006, 02:04 PM |
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| Forum: Poetry For Review 03-17-2006, 02:01 PM |
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thats really well written, i love the imagery...
thats really well written, i love the imagery that you receive upon reading this :)!
but ummmm, just a question, the two times you mentioned "broke" did you actually mean it? or was it a mistake and...
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| Forum: Poetry For Review 03-17-2006, 01:57 PM |
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i actually like this poem. i like how you're...
i actually like this poem. i like how you're talking about something that truly is going on in everyday life. it's a great poem, it is, but you misspelled "neither" "predjudice" and "politics". other...
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| Forum: Poetry For Review 03-17-2006, 01:54 PM |
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its actually pretty good... but in the last few...
its actually pretty good...
but in the last few lines, the syllables sound a bit off...
and in one line you say..."i'll try prevent another's pout" which is good, but i think, perhaps you forgot the...
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| Forum: Poetry For Review 03-10-2006, 09:45 AM |
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A Tale of Travesty
A new tale
Sifts through the wind
A pull in gravity
An aged letter put through hell
Questions of
Why and how
Echo in my mind
Time to sail
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| Forum: Poetry For Review 03-10-2006, 09:22 AM |
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wow, thats actually pretty good. i like that...
wow, thats actually pretty good.
i like that idea, about what high school is really like.
you made a really good point, and its really good the way that it is, short, simple, and without too much...
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| Forum: Poetry For Review 02-22-2006, 10:51 AM |
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Chipped Mysteries
Any opinions guys??
Falling snow
Wisps and whizzes
Down those old stairs
Begging to be discovered
Old chipped paint
And emotions fizzed
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| Forum: The TeenLit Lounge 02-22-2006, 10:44 AM |
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| Forum: Poetry For Review 02-17-2006, 03:34 PM |
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| Forum: Suggestions, Feedback & Questions 02-17-2006, 03:29 PM |
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| Forum: The TeenLit Lounge 02-17-2006, 03:28 PM |
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lol, thats kind of amusing...but kind of...
lol, thats kind of amusing...but kind of sad...
my most embarrassing momennnnt...
er...
probably getting my first bra with my mother coming in and out of the fitting room without notice...
it was...
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| Forum: Miscellanous Drafts for Feedback 02-17-2006, 03:25 PM |
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 Opinions? Critiques? Anything?
This is a poem I had written a short while ago... I've called it "Cacaw", for obvious reasons, which you will probably realize upon further reading...umm. I was just looking for some critiques, or...
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| Forum: Miscellanous Drafts for Feedback 02-17-2006, 03:19 PM |
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| Forum: Poetry For Review 02-17-2006, 03:12 PM |
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Reply to Nightmare
Wow. that was unbelievably short, but it didnt need a reason to continue on, it was great on its own. good work! :)
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