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 02-17-2006, 03:25 PM
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Join Date: Feb 2006
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 Opinions? Critiques? Anything?
This is a poem I had written a short while ago... I've called it "Cacaw", for obvious reasons, which you will probably realize upon further reading...umm. I was just looking for some critiques, or opinions, and such, and I was wondering if the ending was too sudden? Should I make the poem longer? Or what?? I'm kinda stuck...help? Pretty please?
"Cacaw! Cacaw!" This old bird croons Awaiting answer From her fellow friends Not a single answer No, not tonight, you bird. "Cacaw!" Once more, too soon "Cacaw!" Perhaps this best end No more nonsense You silly, silly bird. "Cacaw! Cacaw!" This silly old loon Carries on In her obnoxious trend Stop it! Stop it! They're not coming! "Cacaw..." Not a single answer, you silly bird...
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 Stella Zara 
I stared death in the eye, said the note from yesterday
And as I sat and wondered,
The boy with the green eyes winked at me
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