Wishing- please review ty!

girlonfire · 04-09-2006, 01:48 PM

Aproximatley...
Two sixteenths' of my life i spend resenting,
Wishing i was somewhere else,
Trying to find equations,
Just a little more appealing,
So as i can cheat life,
Staring out the window,
Wishing,
Hoping,
Praying,
For some bizzare miracle,
For fate to sweep me off my feet,
Because the sun out there,
Golden yellow,
Full,
Warm,
So full of warmth...
And it's intoxicating,
I'm wanting to be out there so badly,
Wishing,
And i turn back to the teacher,
Turn back to the cold souls,
Next to me,
I wonder how i can learn this,
When all i want to do is sit in the sun and write,
And learn what it means to be happy,

Ameerah8 · 04-09-2006, 02:41 PM

I like this poem and the other one titled '?'. lol, i can totally relate. I like this part the best: Aproximatley...
Two sixteenths' of my life i spend resenting,
Wishing i was somewhere else,
Trying to find equations,
Just a little more appealing,
So as i can cheat life,

and the last two lines....lol, Love em.

Oblivion · 04-12-2006, 12:26 PM

i to can relate to this poem
"Two sixteenths' of my life i spend resenting,
Wishing i was somewhere else,
Trying to find equations,
Just a little more appealing,
So as i can cheat life,
Staring out the window,"

~swissmochafudge~ · 04-13-2006, 05:04 PM

Nice, I feel ya!

04-09-2006, 01:48 PM	#1
girlonfire TeenLit Regular Join Date: Apr 2006 Posts: 72	Wishing- please review ty! Aproximatley... Two sixteenths' of my life i spend resenting, Wishing i was somewhere else, Trying to find equations, Just a little more appealing, So as i can cheat life, Staring out the window, Wishing, Hoping, Praying, For some bizzare miracle, For fate to sweep me off my feet, Because the sun out there, Golden yellow, Full, Warm, So full of warmth... And it's intoxicating, I'm wanting to be out there so badly, Wishing, And i turn back to the teacher, Turn back to the cold souls, Next to me, I wonder how i can learn this, When all i want to do is sit in the sun and write, And learn what it means to be happy,

04-09-2006, 02:41 PM	#2
Ameerah8 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2005 Posts: 214	I like this poem and the other one titled '?'. lol, i can totally relate. I like this part the best: Aproximatley... Two sixteenths' of my life i spend resenting, Wishing i was somewhere else, Trying to find equations, Just a little more appealing, So as i can cheat life, and the last two lines....lol, Love em. __________________ Birds of a feather flock together, And so will pigs and swine; Rats and mice can have their choice And so will I have mine.

04-12-2006, 12:26 PM	#3
Oblivion Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2005 Posts: 184	i to can relate to this poem "Two sixteenths' of my life i spend resenting, Wishing i was somewhere else, Trying to find equations, Just a little more appealing, So as i can cheat life, Staring out the window," __________________ Never be afraid to do something new. Remember, amateurs built the ark; professionals built the titanic. What would you attempt if you knew you could not fail. Vision without action is a daydream. Action without vision is a nightmare.

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04-13-2006, 05:04 PM	#4
~swissmochafudge~ Senior Member Join Date: May 2005 Posts: 156	Nice, I feel ya!