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girlonfire 04-09-2006 01:48 PM

Wishing- please review ty!
 
Aproximatley...
Two sixteenths' of my life i spend resenting,
Wishing i was somewhere else,
Trying to find equations,
Just a little more appealing,
So as i can cheat life,
Staring out the window,
Wishing,
Hoping,
Praying,
For some bizzare miracle,
For fate to sweep me off my feet,
Because the sun out there,
Golden yellow,
Full,
Warm,
So full of warmth...
And it's intoxicating,
I'm wanting to be out there so badly,
Wishing,
And i turn back to the teacher,
Turn back to the cold souls,
Next to me,
I wonder how i can learn this,
When all i want to do is sit in the sun and write,
And learn what it means to be happy,

Ameerah8 04-09-2006 02:41 PM

I like this poem and the other one titled '?'. lol, i can totally relate. I like this part the best: Aproximatley...
Two sixteenths' of my life i spend resenting,
Wishing i was somewhere else,
Trying to find equations,
Just a little more appealing,
So as i can cheat life,

and the last two lines....lol, Love em.

Oblivion 04-12-2006 12:26 PM

i to can relate to this poem
"Two sixteenths' of my life i spend resenting,
Wishing i was somewhere else,
Trying to find equations,
Just a little more appealing,
So as i can cheat life,
Staring out the window,"

~swissmochafudge~ 04-13-2006 05:04 PM

Nice, I feel ya!


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