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daz3026 · 01-07-2006, 10:41 PM

Hey!!! well im new to TeenLit and this was the first thing i read

.. i dont really understand ur poem/dream.. though im only 13 so yea.. but idk in my opinion dreams..are sumtimes really ahrd for other people to understand. but thats just me. i bet some other ppl got ur poem.!!!!
alrite well byez!

Unwilling · 01-07-2006, 10:44 PM

Well, welcome to TeenLit. However, as something that tries to emanulate a poem; it fails. I'd have to consult an expert surrealist or psychologist to get the dream right.

daz3026 · 01-08-2006, 04:05 PM

Good point... dreams are hard to get just right.. but also... i think only the person who has the dream can really find the meaning.

girlonfire · 05-02-2006, 08:53 AM

ohhh yuck....people keep saying dentists....i just get one hell of a kiss...sounds like you're making out dirty....tell me i'm not the only one who thought that....funny thing is i like it...thats so wrong

girlonfire · 05-02-2006, 08:55 AM

oh....let me help you with that ( u sed u needed a phsycologist thingy to work it out)

its kinda bait...you wanna good snog soon and fast with sum 1 who isnt doing it for a secret bet

Ameerah8 · 05-05-2006, 01:11 PM

Unwilling, stop putting yourself down, lol your poetry is good. esp. this one. I don't know why but the last two lines "i was only missing a nose when you left." reminded me of shel silverstein. but when i read it the picture i got was also a dentist, And, lol, the whole point of poetry is expressing yourself! "Yourself". meaning that no one can't 'get it'. there is no wrong image that poetry can create, it's the same with dreams. i don't think you should change it.

girlonfire · 05-07-2006, 10:16 AM

i'll drink to that!

Unwilling · 05-07-2006, 09:39 PM

While indeed that is a idealistic approach, your view-points on poetry being made, I have always been taught that it's what the readers ellicit from the poem itself; if it's capable of giving the reader an emotion. I'm ashamed because I rushed to make this poem without thinking about it.

Isis · 05-07-2006, 10:20 PM

hey, are you going to rewrite any of this portfolio stuff?

~swissmochafudge~ · 05-08-2006, 09:49 AM

Its cool!

I love it how I don't know what the hell it is! Thats what dreams are..nice job putting it to paper.

xo

01-07-2006, 10:41 PM	#11
daz3026 TeenLit Regular Join Date: Jan 2006 Posts: 44	Hey!!! well im new to TeenLit and this was the first thing i read .. i dont really understand ur poem/dream.. though im only 13 so yea.. but idk in my opinion dreams..are sumtimes really ahrd for other people to understand. but thats just me. i bet some other ppl got ur poem.!!!! alrite well byez! __________________ •\|--Daz--\|•

01-08-2006, 04:05 PM	#13
daz3026 TeenLit Regular Join Date: Jan 2006 Posts: 44	Good point... dreams are hard to get just right.. but also... i think only the person who has the dream can really find the meaning. __________________ •\|--Daz--\|•

05-02-2006, 08:53 AM	#14
girlonfire TeenLit Regular Join Date: Apr 2006 Posts: 72	thats disgusting ohhh yuck....people keep saying dentists....i just get one hell of a kiss...sounds like you're making out dirty....tell me i'm not the only one who thought that....funny thing is i like it...thats so wrong __________________ I'm like an atom, So small you can not see me, Insignificant? Try and split me, And i'm not so little anymore...

05-02-2006, 08:55 AM	#15
girlonfire TeenLit Regular Join Date: Apr 2006 Posts: 72	oh....let me help you with that ( u sed u needed a phsycologist thingy to work it out) its kinda bait...you wanna good snog soon and fast with sum 1 who isnt doing it for a secret bet __________________ I'm like an atom, So small you can not see me, Insignificant? Try and split me, And i'm not so little anymore...

05-05-2006, 01:11 PM	#16
Ameerah8 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2005 Posts: 214	Unwilling, stop putting yourself down, lol your poetry is good. esp. this one. I don't know why but the last two lines "i was only missing a nose when you left." reminded me of shel silverstein. but when i read it the picture i got was also a dentist, And, lol, the whole point of poetry is expressing yourself! "Yourself". meaning that no one can't 'get it'. there is no wrong image that poetry can create, it's the same with dreams. i don't think you should change it. __________________ Birds of a feather flock together, And so will pigs and swine; Rats and mice can have their choice And so will I have mine.

01-07-2006, 10:44 PM	#12
Unwilling TeenLit Regular Join Date: Oct 2005 Posts: 67	Well, welcome to TeenLit. However, as something that tries to emanulate a poem; it fails. I'd have to consult an expert surrealist or psychologist to get the dream right.

05-07-2006, 10:16 AM	#17
girlonfire TeenLit Regular Join Date: Apr 2006 Posts: 72	hehe i'll drink to that! __________________ I'm like an atom, So small you can not see me, Insignificant? Try and split me, And i'm not so little anymore...

05-07-2006, 09:39 PM	#18
Unwilling TeenLit Regular Join Date: Oct 2005 Posts: 67	While indeed that is a idealistic approach, your view-points on poetry being made, I have always been taught that it's what the readers ellicit from the poem itself; if it's capable of giving the reader an emotion. I'm ashamed because I rushed to make this poem without thinking about it. __________________ You make my heart bleed,/but I like blood,/so I guess it's okay./But you make my heart drip/out blood, but you give me/a bandaid. My lungs are/full of your lies and truth./and that's why I love and hate you.

05-07-2006, 10:20 PM	#19
Isis Senior Member Join Date: May 2005 Posts: 276	hey, are you going to rewrite any of this portfolio stuff? __________________ http://www.intunemonthly.com/forums Please click above and help me make a living! Come chat about music at InTune. You want to. You know you do. Cheers!

05-08-2006, 09:49 AM	#20
~swissmochafudge~ Senior Member Join Date: May 2005 Posts: 156	Its cool! I love it how I don't know what the hell it is! Thats what dreams are..nice job putting it to paper. xo

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