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Old 12-04-2005, 12:41 PM   #1
Unwilling
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Alright, so I had a dream a few nights ago; and what is happening in the poem is one of the few events that I remember. I'm not that great at poems, but this is one of the few places where I go to present my poetry to the world. Please, it's a rather short one, so it will not take long - just be blunt and all that honest crud - I trust your criticisms.



Your bare face
prying my tongue from the gums
(once taxed for restraint)
eroding the interjectors
rapid anticipation
- I was only missing my nose
when you left




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