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Old 05-21-2005, 02:46 PM   #1
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Default "The Runaway"


Tore me apart.
Serpants togue flickers,
Mrcey! Mercy!

Rainy night.

A truant by the roadside,
Mad man.
Rain in blinding sheets.

A Jester's laugh echoes.
Mocking my misery.

My net is empty,

Stumble to my knees,
Darnkeness too deep.
Cry myself to sleep.

Rain pours down.
Nightmares hoofbeats on the road,
Pass me by.

I am invisible.

Weary I wake,
My net is empty...

Dare I fix it?
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Old 05-21-2005, 02:48 PM   #2
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Thumbs up Great Job!!

That is a Great poem!
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Old 05-26-2005, 04:01 PM   #3
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Yea I agree! I feel the emotions, but the title? What does a runaway have to do with it? Or am I not seeing soething?
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Old 05-27-2005, 09:40 AM   #4
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Ya its ment to be kind of abtract..the title is titled Runaway because its supposed to be about somebody who's run away on a rainy night...etc etc..I do't blame you for not understanding!

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