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Old 10-30-2006, 02:08 PM   #1
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Default Its in the stars

Wish on a million falling stars,
That this fate corrupted will end,
Tell me strings of future star allignmnents,
Attatched to me,
Have segments of happiness waiting,
And pray on a million invisable gods,
The last two years were a nightmare,

Tell me i'll wake up eleven at seven fifteen,
My best friend beside me eyes groggy with sleep,
I cant give up anything,
But i can give anything for you,
On my first day of high school,

Let me change fate please,
I want to twist sinews of matter,
Just to change the star allignment,

If fame is cut out and a happy family to,
Just let me keep my friends,
And i'll be fine,
They're all i need...
"I wrote how the first science was made by magic..."

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Old 10-30-2006, 11:04 PM   #2
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wow, this was really nice. I liked it a lot. I don't know what it was, but when I read it the words really, I dont know, spoke to me, I guess. That sounds cliche, but I can't quite exaplain it. Do you know what I mean? Haha, maybe I'm just weird. But it's a very good poem! I'm going to go check out some of your others.
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