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|04-12-2006, 05:53 PM||#1|
Join Date: Apr 2006
Night Light...plz critique...
What's up with this?
I can't see the moon tonight,
No beacon of light?
No night light?
You sure you haven't seen a slither of her?
No crust of her beauty?
I'll sit here,
And wait for her return,
The road ahead looks so dark without her,
And you always said look for the light in the darkness,
But there is no light tonight,
Nothing to grasp onto,
Nothing to follow,
No asprin to calm my pounding head,
to stich my broken heart,
No torch to show me the pot hole,
No railing to mark the cliff edge,
No moon tonight,
Will she cry tomorrow?
When she finds my body?
Lying at the bottom of the lake?
She has no tears,
I'll stay put,
No looking for the light in the darkness,
Not in the dark,
I'm like an atom,
So small you can not see me,
Try and split me,
And i'm not so little anymore...
Last edited by girlonfire : 04-12-2006 at 05:55 PM.
|04-13-2006, 04:57 PM||#2|
Ok, here we go.
And: I did my worst. I've been really slacking in this forum lately, but a combination of new entries, a lot of elipses, and a lot of chatspeak kind of made me lose resolve. Crap. But I'm back in action! And I've got a lot of poems that need seeing to, it seems! *cracks knuckles*
Please click above and help me make a living! Come chat about music at InTune. You want to. You know you do.
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