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Old 04-12-2006, 03:26 PM   #1
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Default Oooh darkness!

You send shivers down my spine,
Just thinking you could be so cruel,
And i mean it,
Just thinking about it makes me want to cringe in sick delight,
I'm sorry and i'm not,
To think i could bruise something that isn't even solid...
Your soul,
I've shattered it,
Oops,
Please forgive me,
It wasn't intentional,
She asked me...
She did,
In I.C.T,
Asked me if i wasn't a fool for loosing you,
No,
I wasn't,
I was a fool to loose her to you,
Because you're a parasite,
And she's rotting from the inside out
'Cause she's hooked on your ****,

I am a fool,
Not for much though,
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Insignificant?
Try and split me,
And i'm not so little anymore...
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Old 04-12-2006, 03:45 PM   #2
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Default its not very strong this piece

i already know, but i'm dead bored, no ones on line...may b if id written bout that it wud uf bin stronger, ah well, reply if u hav ny coments, thanx
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