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Old 04-03-2006, 04:04 PM   #1
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Default coo-el thank u Isis.... i won't b able to stop now....

You hear about deep people,
Quiet ones,
Subtle ones,
Defined and feared,
For individuality?
Thats me,
I'm like a black hole,
God forbid,
I never end,
And i get so deep,
I fall into myself,
But hey...
Aint that just crazy,
To be so deep,
You can't handle your self?
But thats me,
The best and worst that i can be,
This is cool,
And it's not,
I'm afraid and i'm determined,
You can't break if you're already broken,
Can you?
Didn't think so,
I can,
Touch your soul if i want to,
Hell yeah,
I can,
Or i can tear it apart....

What you think? It's just a starter poem with a wierd style, just like an entrance, of me...
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Old 04-04-2006, 09:57 AM   #2
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Your poetry is very differant. It looks more like song lyrics though to me, and I can imagine them being sung pretty well. I like it but it needs more pizzaz and individuality to grab me.
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