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 04-03-2006, 04:04 PM
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Join Date: Apr 2006
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 coo-el thank u Isis.... i won't b able to stop now....
You hear about deep people,
Quiet ones, Subtle ones, Defined and feared, For individuality? Yeah, Hey, Thats me, I'm like a black hole, God forbid, I never end, And i get so deep, I fall into myself, But hey... Aint that just crazy, To be so deep, You can't handle your self? But thats me, The best and worst that i can be, This is cool, And it's not, I'm afraid and i'm determined, You can't break if you're already broken, Can you? No, Didn't think so, I can, Touch your soul if i want to, Hell yeah, I can, Or i can tear it apart.... What you think? It's just a starter poem with a wierd style, just like an entrance, of me... |
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04-04-2006, 09:57 AM
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Join Date: May 2005
Posts: 156
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Your poetry is very differant. It looks more like song lyrics though to me, and I can imagine them being sung pretty well. I like it but it needs more pizzaz and individuality to grab me.
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