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Old 01-07-2006, 10:48 PM   #1
daz3026
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Alrite, hey guys!! well this is my first time at TeenLit and so far everything loks great. So i though i'd share a poem that i wrote 3 nites ago for school.

For all you people who knew him, I feel for you
For all you people who met him, what can I do?
To relieve the pain and all the sorrow,
So you can live life to the fullest without worring about tomorrow.

I remember that horrible night as if it were yesturday
It was the third of that horrible month of may.
Rain pouring down like the tears of a child
Who has been neglected by his parents, no it wasnt mild.

There was a party at a hotel, everyone was there
A girl was dancing like crazy, she didnt care.
Who gave her her drink or what was in it,
that how it all got started thats how it got lit.

Not lit on fire but lit by death
Who knew that drink was her last breath.
1 sip, 2 sip, 3 sip, she took of her contaminated drink
After that she was so high she couldn't even blink.

That's how she was able to be seduced by this evel mastermind
Who raped her and beat her to death, there was no rewind.
A 15 year old was murdered tonite
Nothing after that was ever alright.

But was it her fault? becasue she didnt take care
Of what they put in her drink, but its still not fair.
Of course it wasnt her fault! because that maniac was on the loose
He had escaped, and she was the 10th girl he had murdered and abused.

Well thats it! Ive always liked poetry writting but for sum reason i pushed it behind but now i wanna write poems..alot of 'em! but please let me know wut u think and how it can be better! dont worry im good with both good critisism!
Luv yall
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