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Old 03-08-2007, 01:11 PM   #1
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Talking Another Poem I wrote durring Biology Class

I wrote this poem durring Bio. But I think I will contiune to write because I have an A in that class... So...


Roses are Red
Violets are Blue
I hate my boyfrined
And He hates me too
I hate it when he looks at me
I hate it when he smiles
I hate it when he flips his hair
And I hate all of his dang whiles
I hate it how he loves on me
And I hate it how he crys

He hates me when I wink at him
He hates me when I think
He hates me when I get all mouthy
And he hates me when I sing
He hates me when I trip and fall
He hate me when I'm down

But most of all we hate eachother when theres nothing to hate at all


((This was written for a friend and her boyfrined that both annoy me because they wont break up but are never happy with eachother))
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Old 03-13-2007, 12:35 PM   #2
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I have another one from Biology... Here it is


To help a friend
to get to her heart
Its hard to do
Its almost an art

You need to work
And hard may I add
The woek will pay off
And you'll be happy once again

She'll thank you so much
As you dry up her tears
You'll wish you were hers
For years and for years

Your frinedship will grow
And tears are all gone
She knows not of your love
and you tell her of none

As you grow up and you stay close together
Your heart just grows for her
Much bigger and better
Your about to tell her

You cant hide anymore
You loved her so much
And know sh should know

She stares in your eyes
And can tell of your love
The time was just right
So she gave you her love
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Old 07-06-2007, 06:20 PM   #3
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Second poem is weird but the first I think I'm gonna send to a friend (giving you credit of course) if that's okay? It sounds like the poem-y thing at the end of the movie 10 things I Hate about you, any inspriation there?
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Old 07-06-2007, 11:23 PM   #4
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Second poem is weird but the first I think I'm gonna send to a friend (giving you credit of course) if that's okay? It sounds like the poem-y thing at the end of the movie 10 things I Hate about you, any inspriation there?
Thanks for that loving-sisterly-comment. And its fine if you do. I did have a tiny bit of inspritaion. But I did not realize it until I read it to myself.
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Old 07-07-2007, 09:05 PM   #5
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Nice. I think the whole "But most of all we hate each other when there's nothing to hate at all" is a knock off, "But most of all what I hate most is that I don't really hate you, not even a little bit, not even at all" but anyway I still like it!
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Nice. I think the whole "But most of all we hate each other when there's nothing to hate at all" is a knock off, "But most of all what I hate most is that I don't really hate you, not even a little bit, not even at all" but anyway I still like it!
Haha! Knock off? Really?! Well thanks for the commments anyways!
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