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Old 11-07-2006, 05:42 PM   #1
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Post Breaking Me feedback ?

Feedback and constructive criticism would be nice =)

Breaking Me

How do you confess your love to someone you can never have?
How do you pour your soul into a heart that can never be yours?
If loving to the point of obsession is lethal than I have been maimed
If wanting you is treason then I have betrayed

I'm falling for you ,
and all resistance leads back to you
Kill me slowly
Your heart will always be out of my grasp

You know what I seek, but it is yours to give
You know how I feel yet you turn away ,
and its breaking me inside.
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