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Old 10-30-2006, 11:28 PM   #3
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Your descriptions are amazing. Especially at the beginning; I felt right in the story. You did a great job! Ok, so some constructive criticism: It seemed rushed starting out when we found out the main character's husband had passed. For some reason I felt like the same feeling the story started out with had died down, it didn't seem as fresh and unique. But it definitely picked back up at the end. That's about all I can think of, so nice job!
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