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04-13-2006, 09:37 AM | #1 |
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cool, i like it. lol, did you actually go to this concert? it sounds fun.
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04-13-2006, 10:57 AM | #2 |
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yea i did it was realy fun!!! there were 3 bands and a ton of people!!!! it was awesome!!
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05-08-2006, 12:13 PM | #3 |
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well if you want review, i think it's ok, but the writing is bland. "it was", "there were", etc. Try and spice up the language a bit.
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