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 01-08-2006, 02:03 PM
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Join Date: May 2005
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Okay,
I like the idea, but too many of the words seem kind of forced. Try looking in a thesaurus and/or rhyming dictionary and I'm sure you could eliminate a lot of akward words/phrases. You might want to drag out the last line into two lines like so: We can all have a place to call heaven. We can all have a place to call home. But I really love the last three lines as well as the last line of the first stanza. You definetly need to work out some rhyming and phrasing flaws but your poem as good potential, and some really great lines. |
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