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 05-20-2005, 12:40 PM
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Join Date: May 2005
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 "Dusk"
Hi there...This is just a poem I scribbled out one night looking out my window. Please read and critique!
"Dusk" Dusky lavender light, Lingering like mist, In the evening air. A cricket violin chirps, Playing a sad tune, A lullaby. A nursery window is open, Warm breeze, Sweeps through the room. Rustling through the, Sleeping babes tousled locks, He murmurs in his sleep. The sun slips out of view, Under the horizon, Good night sun! Nightfall, Waits for the morning. |
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05-20-2005, 01:31 PM
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Join Date: Apr 2005
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 Good Job.
that is a good poem.
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05-20-2005, 02:51 PM
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Join Date: Apr 2005
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 awesome!
That is a really good poem!
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05-26-2005, 04:03 PM
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Join Date: May 2005
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This is a really, really good poem (:P Sorry, I just had to continue the pattern!) But yes, i think its one of your better poems
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