"Dusk"
 

Hi there...This is just a poem I scribbled out one night looking out my window. Please read and critique!


"Dusk"

Dusky lavender light,
Lingering like mist,
In the evening air.

A cricket violin chirps,
Playing a sad tune,
A lullaby.

A nursery window is open,
Warm breeze,
Sweeps through the room.

Rustling through the,
Sleeping babes tousled locks,
He murmurs in his sleep.

The sun slips out of view,
Under the horizon,
Good night sun!

Nightfall,
Waits for the morning.

Good Job.
 

that is a good poem. :D

awesome!
 

That is a really good poem! :)

This is a really, really good poem (:P Sorry, I just had to continue the pattern!) But yes, i think its one of your better poems