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~swissmochafudge~ 05-20-2005 12:40 PM

Hi there...This is just a poem I scribbled out one night looking out my window. Please read and critique!


Dusky lavender light,
Lingering like mist,
In the evening air.

A cricket violin chirps,
Playing a sad tune,
A lullaby.

A nursery window is open,
Warm breeze,
Sweeps through the room.

Rustling through the,
Sleeping babes tousled locks,
He murmurs in his sleep.

The sun slips out of view,
Under the horizon,
Good night sun!

Waits for the morning.

Jake251 05-20-2005 01:31 PM

Good Job.
that is a good poem. :D

nyumegs 05-20-2005 02:51 PM

That is a really good poem! :)

xXxTigerEyesxXx 05-26-2005 04:03 PM

This is a really, really good poem (:P Sorry, I just had to continue the pattern!) But yes, i think its one of your better poems

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