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**JEM** · 03-19-2006, 10:07 PM

Well, first I will have some constructive criticism, then I'll think of a title. First, the rhyme seems a little forced, especially in the last four lines. Although, sword and horde is pretty creative. Also can't has an apostrophe in it. Very few people today write in couplets, so that's pretty cool.

I think this poem was written, just for the fun of being written. There really isn't any need for a title. BUT if you want one, I would suggest "The Battle". I like 2 word titles.

03-19-2006, 10:07 PM	#4
JEM Administrator Join Date: Aug 2005 Posts: 424	Well, first I will have some constructive criticism, then I'll think of a title. First, the rhyme seems a little forced, especially in the last four lines. Although, sword and horde is pretty creative. Also can't has an apostrophe in it. Very few people today write in couplets, so that's pretty cool. I think this poem was written, just for the fun of being written. There really isn't any need for a title. BUT if you want one, I would suggest "The Battle". I like 2 word titles. __________________ Joseph Your Favorite Forum Community Leader