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Jake251
05-10-2005, 02:23 PM
Ok Here is my poem. will someone tell me if it's good?

Tomrrow
Tomorrow will hold anew set of roadblocks.
We will get though them.
With your help we can make it.
Turn the roadblocks into gifts.
These roadblocks everyone gets.
With someones help they can make it through them!
No one likes the roadblocks they get.
They need to learn to.
They can turn them into special gifts.
These gifts can be good,bad,big,or small.


The End :D

Jake251
05-10-2005, 05:25 PM
I have question how come nobody is ever on here? :confused: , except Gerards_luvr
and nyumegs.
Let Me Know! ;)

Älskade_Ängel
05-11-2005, 02:17 PM
Hey well done! it's great, although you made tiny mistakes. Listen, i think you put this post in the wrong place, it isn't suppose to be here. I might be wrong though.

I have to go now, catch you around Jake ;)

Jake251
05-11-2005, 02:21 PM
thanks! :) I reliezed i put it in the wrong place after i had already posted it. silly me! :D

Jake251
05-19-2005, 03:59 PM
:p i might of put it in the wrong place, but it's getting published!!! WWWWWWWWWWWHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHAAAAAAAAOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO! !!!! :p

~swissmochafudge~
05-21-2005, 02:38 PM
AWESOME! Great job!

Maddie
09-21-2005, 11:42 PM
congrats
Maddie