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Old 05-03-2006, 08:55 AM   #1
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Default ...? this needs improvment ---

not exactly sure what iwas getting at here... just had a feeling and tried to write it.. dunno if it worked as i meant it to but.. hmm wht do you thnk?

Who would’ve known,
This unwanted love
This unheard voice...
A prayer whispered without truth
Without beleiving.
A breath of innocence
Tainted with the drug
That swirled her into oblivion
That night.
A kiss beneath the heavens
The golden warmth
Of an untouched heart
Rising from the good cheer
And heartiness of the season
A small bird lands in the ashes
Of herself.
Wild noises
Crowds of wax dolls
Reaching out to grab her
Strangness and likeness
Good and better
Sends her into a complete spiral of misundestanding -
Who would’ve known...
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