![]() |
If this is your first visit, be sure to check out the FAQ by clicking the link above. You may have to register before you can post: click the register link above to proceed. To start viewing messages, select the forum that you want to visit from the selection below. |
|
![]() |
|
Thread Tools | Search this Thread | Display Modes |
|
![]() |
#1 |
Senior Member
|
![]()
Hey man, I stole your name.
Be offended by my pronoun usage. Everyone else: does this work, or is it too literal/simplistic? I know myself by the name you call me, the enveloping press of your voice into my hands. Steady in their sleepy, speckled path, I stand easily on calloused feet and lightly in knowing, shoulders back against your breeze. Should it cease, I'll be left with pictures of my place, and no sense of who I am within it.
__________________
http://www.intunemonthly.com/forums Please click above and help me make a living! Come chat about music at InTune. You want to. You know you do. Cheers! |
![]() |
![]() |
![]() |
#2 |
Senior Member
Join Date: May 2005
Posts: 156
|
![]()
Definatly not to literal or simplistic. If it was simple, it was beautiful. Good job!
|
![]() |
![]() |
![]() |
Thread Tools | Search this Thread |
Display Modes | |
|
|