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Old 01-09-2006, 09:44 PM   #1
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Post what to change??!

Hey everyone. I just wrote a new poem.. but idont know if you would call it a poem but i was wondering if you could help me think of a title and some things i could change.
When you read it you might have to read it several times because its a confusing poem.!! good luck lol


Today is the tomorrow we worried about yesturday
Yesturday is the future of the past of tommorow
Tommorow is tomorrow
Tomorow holds the future

Time to start over.

so its very short..so may not be a poem!! wut is it then??? and idead or advice???

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