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Old 12-17-2005, 06:25 PM   #1
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Default One root in the desert, another in the sea

At another board we had this contest where we had to write about what Christmas/the holidays meant to us. I turned up my nose and went "lame!" until I realized I had something decent to write about, and a good way to word it. Here's what I entered:



In this mass of snow
we are the central isle,
the Mediterranean.

We gather around the island
in the kitchen, a copper-pot sky
with a wrought iron oven, the sun.
A sacrificial lamb will be born
at midnight, but for now
we have one for our dinner.

Waiting for Nicholas to kick off his clogs
and join the rest of us (he's late every year
- must be a business evening)
something sounds from the attic.
A three peice band; for all the corners
of our ocean we have resonance,
we have a song of common kin.
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Old 12-19-2005, 08:46 AM   #2
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Nice. I DO like this. For the first paragraph (is that what you call it?) it sounded remarkably like a news report or the such (this could me just me...you never know) but it really picked up after that. Extremely so. I LOVED THIS:

We gather around the island
in the kitchen, a copper-pot sky
with a wrought iron oven, the sun.

Woot!
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Old 12-19-2005, 01:04 PM   #3
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like the imagry of the copper pot sky,

got to go, at school, will post more later.
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Old 01-08-2006, 04:11 PM   #4
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Talking love it

I really like the poem.. and the first and second stanza....


oh ! ~swissmochafudge~ : its stanza not paragraph!! lol : D
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