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Old 04-05-2005, 12:27 PM   #1
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Post Don't Know if It's Any Good

Okay, so here's the prob:
I've been working on this story for about a year. It'll be just about 200 some pages if it was in book form. I'm on my third revisal and I think it's good, but I have no idea if anyone else would like it! Can you tell me if it sounds good? I'll give you the basic gyst:
So there's these six girls: Sam, Rae, Nolee, Honey, Daisy and Mari (who tells the story) They are all foster children, living in an abusive home. Daisy is pregnant, so everyone wants to get her out of there. They run away by stealing their foster dad's car. Along the way, they meet Andrew and Mona, a woman and her son who give them help. Mari and Andrew get engaged before they move on to their final destination: New York. Between Andrew's farm and NYC, they work at a soda fountain, perform at a talent contest, etc. Then, they finally reach NYC and get jobs and an apartment (Honey turned 18 over the trip)During this time, Andrew and Mari are having a long-distance relationship. He is building her a house and she promises to come home to him when the house is done. Also, Nolee and Mari have always looked alike, but have never known if they are twins, so they are on a road to discovering their true identities. Finally, Daisy has the baby, the Social Services catch up with them and they are going ot be sent back to their evil foster dad. Mona, Andrew's mom, volunteers to take them though and they move in. It's pretty much good from there...ya know, the baby growing, Andrew and Mari in love, and Nolee and Mari meeting their birth mom.
Sound good? Let me cuz I want to show someone (like a publishe) and see if they like it....you can always e-me at [removed by admin]

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Old 04-29-2005, 01:21 PM   #2
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I have also wirtten a 200 saome page book. yours spounds really good. If you want I can read it adn help you revise it. I give you all rights incase you think I might steal it or soemthing. I will not I am jsut so into reading originals. Just let me know and mabye we can work something out!?!
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Old 05-02-2005, 11:18 AM   #3
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Default muchos gracias!!

Thanks for responding! I have the story at home on a disk...i'll try to post it up here and when I get it up I'll let you know
you can always email me at s 2816 @ psdschools.org (no spaces, of course) I'm glad somebody actually wants to respond!
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Old 05-10-2005, 02:43 PM   #4
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yeah it sounds great!
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Old 05-26-2005, 05:21 AM   #5
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Wink I think I love you... but what a I so afraid of?

...Sorry for the title! LOL! That song was stuck in my head *inocently smiles*

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Okay, down to buisness...

I think your story sounds GREAT! and I would love to recive it! okay here it is:

all you type in is missyberghman and I'm @yahoo.com (I hope that works!)

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Old 09-21-2005, 11:51 PM   #6
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Good luck with getting it published!
Send a killer query letter!
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Old 12-07-2005, 03:46 PM   #7
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sounds great,
be sure to tell us if it gets published, i wanna read it
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Old 12-07-2005, 10:40 PM   #8
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Default It sounds really good

wow. you make me want to read the story really bad. I would love to read it and give you feed back as well. e me @ lemurlover14 and its @mchsi.com.

i have a story posted on the long term board if any one would be willing to cheack it out.


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Old 03-06-2006, 11:47 AM   #9
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i think the book is fantastic for a first, i'm also writing my first book i'll write a thread and see what you think.
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Old 03-22-2006, 12:50 AM   #10
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yea.. I think it sounds great.. I love to write but i just dont feel like I am any good.... I need some tips!!!
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