Don't Know if It's Any Good

nyumegs · 04-05-2005, 12:27 PM

Okay, so here's the prob:
I've been working on this story for about a year. It'll be just about 200 some pages if it was in book form. I'm on my third revisal and I think it's good, but I have no idea if anyone else would like it! Can you tell me if it sounds good? I'll give you the basic gyst:
So there's these six girls: Sam, Rae, Nolee, Honey, Daisy and Mari (who tells the story) They are all foster children, living in an abusive home. Daisy is pregnant, so everyone wants to get her out of there. They run away by stealing their foster dad's car. Along the way, they meet Andrew and Mona, a woman and her son who give them help. Mari and Andrew get engaged before they move on to their final destination: New York. Between Andrew's farm and NYC, they work at a soda fountain, perform at a talent contest, etc. Then, they finally reach NYC and get jobs and an apartment (Honey turned 18 over the trip)During this time, Andrew and Mari are having a long-distance relationship. He is building her a house and she promises to come home to him when the house is done. Also, Nolee and Mari have always looked alike, but have never known if they are twins, so they are on a road to discovering their true identities. Finally, Daisy has the baby, the Social Services catch up with them and they are going ot be sent back to their evil foster dad. Mona, Andrew's mom, volunteers to take them though and they move in. It's pretty much good from there...ya know, the baby growing, Andrew and Mari in love, and Nolee and Mari meeting their birth mom.
Sound good? Let me cuz I want to show someone (like a publishe) and see if they like it....you can always e-me at [removed by admin]

Jaida · 04-29-2005, 01:21 PM

Hey.
I have also wirtten a 200 saome page book. yours spounds really good. If you want I can read it adn help you revise it. I give you all rights incase you think I might steal it or soemthing. I will not I am jsut so into reading originals. Just let me know and mabye we can work something out!?!

nyumegs · 05-02-2005, 11:18 AM

Thanks for responding! I have the story at home on a disk...i'll try to post it up here and when I get it up I'll let you know
you can always email me at s 2816 @ psdschools.org (no spaces, of course) I'm glad somebody actually wants to respond!

Jake251 · 05-10-2005, 02:43 PM

yeah it sounds great!

xXxTigerEyesxXx · 05-26-2005, 05:21 AM

...Sorry for the title! LOL! That song was stuck in my head *inocently smiles*

(NOTE to nyumegs: I signed on, just so I could post this! But I think it was a good thing, because now I can get my fluffy, pink explorer hat on, and do some exploring here! Hehe!)

Okay, down to buisness...

I think your story sounds GREAT! and I would love to recive it! okay here it is:

all you type in is missyberghman and I'm @yahoo.com (I hope that works!)
XOXO
Missy

Maddie · 09-21-2005, 11:51 PM

Good luck with getting it published!

Send a killer query letter!
Maddie

Oblivion · 12-07-2005, 03:46 PM

sounds great,
be sure to tell us if it gets published, i wanna read it

runnerkgirl · 12-07-2005, 10:40 PM

wow. you make me want to read the story really bad. I would love to read it and give you feed back as well. e me @ lemurlover14 and its @mchsi.com.

i have a story posted on the long term board if any one would be willing to cheack it out.

Kayla
_______________

I love green!!!

trackfan32 · 03-06-2006, 11:47 AM

i think the book is fantastic for a first, i'm also writing my first book i'll write a thread and see what you think.

dare2dream319 · 03-22-2006, 12:50 AM

yea.. I think it sounds great.. I love to write but i just dont feel like I am any good.... I need some tips!!!

04-05-2005, 12:27 PM	#1
nyumegs TeenLit Regular Join Date: Apr 2005 Posts: 35	Don't Know if It's Any Good Okay, so here's the prob: I've been working on this story for about a year. It'll be just about 200 some pages if it was in book form. I'm on my third revisal and I think it's good, but I have no idea if anyone else would like it! Can you tell me if it sounds good? I'll give you the basic gyst: So there's these six girls: Sam, Rae, Nolee, Honey, Daisy and Mari (who tells the story) They are all foster children, living in an abusive home. Daisy is pregnant, so everyone wants to get her out of there. They run away by stealing their foster dad's car. Along the way, they meet Andrew and Mona, a woman and her son who give them help. Mari and Andrew get engaged before they move on to their final destination: New York. Between Andrew's farm and NYC, they work at a soda fountain, perform at a talent contest, etc. Then, they finally reach NYC and get jobs and an apartment (Honey turned 18 over the trip)During this time, Andrew and Mari are having a long-distance relationship. He is building her a house and she promises to come home to him when the house is done. Also, Nolee and Mari have always looked alike, but have never known if they are twins, so they are on a road to discovering their true identities. Finally, Daisy has the baby, the Social Services catch up with them and they are going ot be sent back to their evil foster dad. Mona, Andrew's mom, volunteers to take them though and they move in. It's pretty much good from there...ya know, the baby growing, Andrew and Mari in love, and Nolee and Mari meeting their birth mom. Sound good? Let me cuz I want to show someone (like a publishe) and see if they like it....you can always e-me at [removed by admin] Last edited by Matt : 04-06-2005 at 02:46 AM. Reason: User posted email address: Against Guidelines

04-29-2005, 01:21 PM	#2
Jaida TeenLit Newbie Join Date: Apr 2005 Posts: 3	Sounds great Hey. I have also wirtten a 200 saome page book. yours spounds really good. If you want I can read it adn help you revise it. I give you all rights incase you think I might steal it or soemthing. I will not I am jsut so into reading originals. Just let me know and mabye we can work something out!?! __________________ Jaida

05-02-2005, 11:18 AM	#3
nyumegs TeenLit Regular Join Date: Apr 2005 Posts: 35	muchos gracias!! Thanks for responding! I have the story at home on a disk...i'll try to post it up here and when I get it up I'll let you know you can always email me at s 2816 @ psdschools.org (no spaces, of course) I'm glad somebody actually wants to respond!

05-10-2005, 02:43 PM	#4
Jake251 TeenLit Regular Join Date: Apr 2005 Posts: 82	yeah it sounds great! __________________ "On cable TV they have a weather channel -- 24 hours of weather. We had something like that where I grew up. We called it a window."

05-26-2005, 05:21 AM	#5
xXxTigerEyesxXx TeenLit Newbie Join Date: May 2005 Posts: 23	I think I love you... but what a I so afraid of? ...Sorry for the title! LOL! That song was stuck in my head inocently smiles (NOTE to nyumegs: I signed on, just so I could post this! But I think it was a good thing, because now I can get my fluffy, pink explorer hat on, and do some exploring here! Hehe!) Okay, down to buisness... I think your story sounds GREAT! and I would love to recive it! okay here it is: all you type in is missyberghman and I'm @yahoo.com (I hope that works!) XOXO Missy __________________ ~~ ~~

09-21-2005, 11:51 PM	#6
Maddie Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2005 Posts: 101	Good luck with getting it published! Send a killer query letter! Maddie

12-07-2005, 03:46 PM	#7
Oblivion Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2005 Posts: 184	sounds great, be sure to tell us if it gets published, i wanna read it __________________ Never be afraid to do something new. Remember, amateurs built the ark; professionals built the titanic. What would you attempt if you knew you could not fail. Vision without action is a daydream. Action without vision is a nightmare.

12-07-2005, 10:40 PM	#8
runnerkgirl TeenLit Regular Join Date: Dec 2005 Posts: 38	It sounds really good wow. you make me want to read the story really bad. I would love to read it and give you feed back as well. e me @ lemurlover14 and its @mchsi.com. i have a story posted on the long term board if any one would be willing to cheack it out. Kayla _______________ I love green!!!

03-06-2006, 11:47 AM	#9
trackfan32 TeenLit Newbie Join Date: Feb 2006 Posts: 6	reply i think the book is fantastic for a first, i'm also writing my first book i'll write a thread and see what you think.

03-22-2006, 12:50 AM	#10
dare2dream319 TeenLit Newbie Join Date: Mar 2006 Posts: 25	yea.. I think it sounds great.. I love to write but i just dont feel like I am any good.... I need some tips!!!

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