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Old 05-08-2006, 01:40 PM   #1
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Default air on air.

I should be asleep.
Iím not (nocturnal).
But this house is dark
And Iím awake by the windÖ
By its whisper of touch and the caress of


Lay back and stop breathing
I say. (Its too loud.)
Instead I listen
And cry.
Because Iím too shy to just peel off my clothes
And wear the windÖ

Iím alone. No one would see me?


Maybe Iím just dreaming and
Really asleep.

But reality isnít this clear.

I roll over in bed, my sheets tangling in my legs and I shut the window.

Critiques, please and thank you.
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