Brisk read. - Page 2

Ameerah8 · 12-20-2005, 04:58 AM

ok here's some of the second chapter (oblivion you inspired me! lol) I edited the first chapter but I'm just going to post what I have of the second chapter. enjoy! BTW the story is called "the third story window"

The only things inside of the room (if you could call it a room) was a rabbit with yellow ears and black fur, a unicorn with a coat so bright it seemed to out shine the sun, and a lion with mane that… well Andrea couldn’t even begin to describe it. There was also a rat but either Andrea hadn’t noticed it or she chose not to pay attention to it; for there was nothing special about this rats appearance. It was a regular dull gray rat. If Andrea had paid attention to his tail she might have thought to look again at the rat, but seeing as she paid no attention to him whatsoever she didn’t see is queer yet unparalleled tail.
The rat as crazy as it seems was the first to speak.
“You know it’s quite rude to stare, and if my memory is correct it’s even a sin in some religions.” Said the rat in a rather stately matter.
At first Andrea didn’t know who was talking. Looking rather stupid, she glanced toward the more mystic animals only to find them looking towards the ground with respectful and humble eyes.
“A rat?” her voice was not afraid but more inquisitive.
“Yes as you see I’m a rat, anything else you want me to clarify for you?” his tone was rather irritated.
“Don’t be so mean Juzial, can’t you see she’s only a little girl.” As the unicorn spoke nothing on her face moved; the words seemed to paint themselves onto Andrea’s brain.
“Child or not she’s a human! And a female at that! She is not fit to rule.” Yelled the lion.
So much for my ‘welcome and thanks for coming’ thought Andrea.
The unicorn seemed taken aback by this. “And so what if she’s a female. If I’m not mistaken so are the lioness who hunt for your food and care for your cubs.” Yelled the unicorn looking as though she was ready to pounce.
“Rule? What do you mean ‘rule’?” Asked Andrea as the lions words finally began to register.
They ignored her and continued to argue.
“Kelipha, nobody asked you.” the lion shot back “I think the Council should let me eat her.”
“Well now that we have your opinion, Lional,” said Juzial “we can move on to more important things; such as….”
“I for one agree with the lion” Interrupted the rabbit looking disgusted with himself.
“You agree with me.” Said Lional looking equally appalled. “Well in that case I definitely disagree. We should not eat the human.”
The rat let out what could be called a sigh of annoyance.
Andrea stared in disbelief. The words “Ignore him, he’s what humans call a ‘jock’” flowed across Andrea’s mind as Kelipha gave her what looked like a smile.

Oblivion · 12-21-2005, 11:27 PM

hahaha i like it, so is the Andrea girls dad gonna be like an ex-council member? just wondering

Ameerah8 · 12-22-2005, 06:10 PM

dono. probably not though...think he should be?

Oblivion · 12-22-2005, 06:12 PM

i dont know, your the author

Cierra · 03-24-2006, 08:06 PM

Ah! Like... what happens next? I love the animals they're funny. but now i've just got to know what happens next. Keep writing. It's really good.

12-20-2005, 04:58 AM	#11
Ameerah8 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2005 Posts: 214	ok here's some of the second chapter (oblivion you inspired me! lol) I edited the first chapter but I'm just going to post what I have of the second chapter. enjoy! BTW the story is called "the third story window" The only things inside of the room (if you could call it a room) was a rabbit with yellow ears and black fur, a unicorn with a coat so bright it seemed to out shine the sun, and a lion with mane that… well Andrea couldn’t even begin to describe it. There was also a rat but either Andrea hadn’t noticed it or she chose not to pay attention to it; for there was nothing special about this rats appearance. It was a regular dull gray rat. If Andrea had paid attention to his tail she might have thought to look again at the rat, but seeing as she paid no attention to him whatsoever she didn’t see is queer yet unparalleled tail. The rat as crazy as it seems was the first to speak. “You know it’s quite rude to stare, and if my memory is correct it’s even a sin in some religions.” Said the rat in a rather stately matter. At first Andrea didn’t know who was talking. Looking rather stupid, she glanced toward the more mystic animals only to find them looking towards the ground with respectful and humble eyes. “A rat?” her voice was not afraid but more inquisitive. “Yes as you see I’m a rat, anything else you want me to clarify for you?” his tone was rather irritated. “Don’t be so mean Juzial, can’t you see she’s only a little girl.” As the unicorn spoke nothing on her face moved; the words seemed to paint themselves onto Andrea’s brain. “Child or not she’s a human! And a female at that! She is not fit to rule.” Yelled the lion. So much for my ‘welcome and thanks for coming’ thought Andrea. The unicorn seemed taken aback by this. “And so what if she’s a female. If I’m not mistaken so are the lioness who hunt for your food and care for your cubs.” Yelled the unicorn looking as though she was ready to pounce. “Rule? What do you mean ‘rule’?” Asked Andrea as the lions words finally began to register. They ignored her and continued to argue. “Kelipha, nobody asked you.” the lion shot back “I think the Council should let me eat her.” “Well now that we have your opinion, Lional,” said Juzial “we can move on to more important things; such as….” “I for one agree with the lion” Interrupted the rabbit looking disgusted with himself. “You agree with me.” Said Lional looking equally appalled. “Well in that case I definitely disagree. We should not eat the human.” The rat let out what could be called a sigh of annoyance. Andrea stared in disbelief. The words “Ignore him, he’s what humans call a ‘jock’” flowed across Andrea’s mind as Kelipha gave her what looked like a smile. __________________ Birds of a feather flock together, And so will pigs and swine; Rats and mice can have their choice And so will I have mine.

12-21-2005, 11:27 PM	#12
Oblivion Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2005 Posts: 184	hahaha i like it, so is the Andrea girls dad gonna be like an ex-council member? just wondering __________________ Never be afraid to do something new. Remember, amateurs built the ark; professionals built the titanic. What would you attempt if you knew you could not fail. Vision without action is a daydream. Action without vision is a nightmare.

12-22-2005, 06:10 PM	#13
Ameerah8 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2005 Posts: 214	dono. probably not though...think he should be? __________________ Birds of a feather flock together, And so will pigs and swine; Rats and mice can have their choice And so will I have mine.

12-22-2005, 06:12 PM	#14
Oblivion Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2005 Posts: 184	i dont know, your the author __________________ Never be afraid to do something new. Remember, amateurs built the ark; professionals built the titanic. What would you attempt if you knew you could not fail. Vision without action is a daydream. Action without vision is a nightmare.

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03-24-2006, 08:06 PM	#15
Cierra TeenLit Newbie Join Date: Mar 2006 Posts: 19	Ah! Like... what happens next? I love the animals they're funny. but now i've just got to know what happens next. Keep writing. It's really good.