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Old 04-12-2006, 07:43 AM   #1
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Default To the people who smile when they should cry

To the people who smile when they should cry,
And cry when they should smile,
To the people who love where they should hate,
You're less and more human than most,
You take morality,
Over instict,
You take chance,
Rather than fact,
You take death,
For justice,
You take death,
With a spoon full of sugar,
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Old 04-12-2006, 07:13 PM   #2
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I like this poem. lol At the last line my brain just automatically said "makes the medicine go down." but for some reason this poem just sticks out to me.....dnon, maybe it's me but bravo either way. and BTW mary poppins is awesome. lol
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Old 04-13-2006, 07:58 AM   #3
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exactly, mary poppins...i dont know y i put that in....glad u lliked it anyways...oh yeah it was something about death being the medicine....
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Old 04-13-2006, 05:12 PM   #4
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YES. I really like this a lot. Its not to metphorical or packed with crazy imagery or feeling or anything which as you know I usually like! But this was nice and simple. /woot/
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