Unwilling, stop putting yourself down, lol your poetry is good. esp. this one. I don't know why but the last two lines "i was only missing a nose when you left." reminded me of shel silverstein. but when i read it the picture i got was also a dentist, And, lol, the whole point of poetry is expressing yourself! "Yourself". meaning that no one can't 'get it'. there is no wrong image that poetry can create, it's the same with dreams. i don't think you should change it.
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Birds of a feather flock together,
And so will pigs and swine;
Rats and mice can have their choice
And so will I have mine.
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