WHOA! GIRLONFIRE! Listen to Unwilling!! She/He has some VERY good points that I agree wholly with. If you can't take sharp criticsism don't be here. Unwilling is trying to help you with your poetry and you telling her/him to **** off was intirely rude and unneccesary (I know you apologized but the fact that you did it in the first place was what gets me going.)
Oh, and a peice of advice, girlonfire... go to www.youngpoets.ca and take a look at some REAL poetry. You need to.