k, i read it once and it sounded good but had no rhythm, but that was cool cuz u sed u weren't big on it, i read it a second time and read it like it was someone talking, there's this type of poetry (no idea what it's called but hey) and its very long and its like a monologue with rhythm and verses and drama, your poem sunded really good like that, i'm pretty sure i like it, everyone has their own style...
I'm like an atom,
So small you can not see me,
Try and split me,
And i'm not so little anymore...