Good motivation. Keep at it. But the poem was a little iffy this time, first off you need to watch your spelling and punctuation. Read some other published poems in an anthology or something and stufy the formats they take, and how published poets use punctuation and stuff.
Also...everything has been done before. And its your job if you want to write about something that you make it your own and unique. No one wants to read something that they've already seen and because you really want to make a name for yourself...you've GOT to get original. Thats how you stand out and get noticed. Keep it up.