Hm. This looks familiar. Have I seen a draft of this anywhere, perhaps? Another site, or a literary thing?
I really don't think it's about a 'proffesion' -- I'm interpreting it as something more personal than that. Our weirdest dreams are so weird because they are personal.
I've finally figured out what's been vexing me about this since I saw this posted. It's the fourth line. I hate to sound illiterate but I think it has too many 'big words' [especially when next to "rapid anticipation"...that should probably stay, though]; something like this is most hardhitting when it sounds to be on the verge of literal, but isn't. Your last two lines do this well.
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