Forum: Poetry For Review 11-24-2005, 01:27 AM |
Replies: 2
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Zle Thanks for the...
Zle
Thanks for the critique, but honestly I didn’t really understand it. I mean maybe you didn’t really understand my meaning in the poem. Like, for start I am comparing...
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Forum: Long Term Writing 10-21-2005, 07:04 PM |
Replies: 3
Views: 230
I really need feedback!
The Burning House:)
The house sat up high on a hill.
The cat peered out from a window sill.
Playing with string in a ball.
Staring at the vastness of it all.
Everything was clean and white.
The...
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Forum: The Writer's Lounge 10-21-2005, 03:41 PM |
Replies: 15
Views: 779
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Forum: The Writer's Lounge 10-20-2005, 01:29 PM |
Replies: 15
Views: 779
I think when I'm writing I'm usually writing...
I think when I'm writing I'm usually writing about myself. I mean the characters in my stories and poems usually represent some part of me that I don't usually show, even if the character seems like...
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Forum: Poetry For Review 10-20-2005, 12:38 AM |
Replies: 2
Views: 931
The Shortest Day of the Year
I could Really use some help. I'm really not sure how to format this or where to put punctuation, anyway it's only a first draft.
Cold winter snapping at life
Snow slapping, beating your...
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Forum: Poetry For Review 08-21-2005, 01:53 AM |
Replies: 10
Views: 613
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Forum: Poetry For Review 08-21-2005, 01:40 AM |
Replies: 7
Views: 465
I really liked this poem, once I reread it. I...
I really liked this poem, once I reread it. I agree alot with what Vennila said. Some of it seemed disconnected and when I read through it the first time I was completely lost and I didn't think I...
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Forum: Poetry For Review 08-21-2005, 01:19 AM |
Replies: 14
Views: 1,171
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Forum: Poetry For Review 08-20-2005, 12:02 AM |
Replies: 14
Views: 1,171
Vennila x vana I see your point about the...
Vennila x vana
I see your point about the punctuation and how it causes the poem to seem disconnected. It is something I'll work on.
"The moon’s faint glow, is the only light,
I can see...
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Forum: Poetry For Review 08-17-2005, 12:44 PM |
Replies: 14
Views: 1,171
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Forum: Poetry For Review 08-17-2005, 12:40 PM |
Replies: 14
Views: 1,171
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Forum: Short Stories For Review 08-17-2005, 12:33 PM |
Replies: 10
Views: 889
Hawley I found your advice really helpful. I...
Hawley
I found your advice really helpful. I honestly never really seriously considered describing the inside of winter's house. I guess I thought it would be boring, and I didn't realize what a...
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Forum: Short Stories For Review 08-17-2005, 12:32 PM |
Replies: 10
Views: 889
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Forum: Poetry For Review 08-17-2005, 02:59 AM |
Replies: 14
Views: 1,171
Lady in Black (a poem needing HELP)
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Lady in black, I hear your cry.
It comes from up above in the sky.
Never by day but only by night,
Do you take your miserable, starless flight.
The moon’s faint glow, is the only light,
I can...
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Forum: Poetry For Review 08-17-2005, 02:57 AM |
Replies: 13
Views: 621
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Forum: Short Stories For Review 08-17-2005, 01:55 AM |
Replies: 11
Views: 480
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Forum: Short Stories For Review 08-17-2005, 01:17 AM |
Replies: 5
Views: 318
Isis I thought this was a really great story. I...
Isis
I thought this was a really great story. I really, really like the imagery. And I thought the descriptions of the city were very vivid. I could really picture it, for example -
"...everything...
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Forum: Short Stories For Review 08-16-2005, 02:17 PM |
Replies: 10
Views: 889
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Forum: Short Stories For Review 08-15-2005, 11:30 PM |
Replies: 10
Views: 889
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Forum: Short Stories For Review 08-15-2005, 11:19 PM |
Replies: 10
Views: 889
Roses for Winter ( a short story needing feedback)
Winter Montgomery had always seemed odd. Some people say she was insane. But in all the ten or so years I lived next door to her, I had never seen anything but beauty come from her house. Each day...
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Forum: The TeenLit Lounge 08-15-2005, 11:07 PM |
Replies: 72
Views: 4,493
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