Forum: Poetry For Review  Yesterday, 04:09 PM |
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 Ha ha your american
i dont mean that ina bad way its just it made that line work , bomb,mom...i'd say mum but it wouldn't work...i like it, its good, has a clean beat, very few flaws, its cool and it has a good message...
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| Forum: Poetry For Review Yesterday, 11:13 AM |
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Maiden Chains
Its a shortie again...it another thing that "popped" into my head, though this on is a LOT older than 'angels'
With every cares and every stroke,
With every kiss you made and broke,
Still the...
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| Forum: Poetry For Review Yesterday, 11:09 AM |
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| Forum: Poetry For Review Yesterday, 11:06 AM |
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 Cool
This is hard. I'm not sure what i want to say...its cool. I like it because it kind of fades in and out with back ground sounds n stuff. But the brackets confuse me a little babes...ah well, i like...
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| Forum: Poetry For Review 06-04-2006, 09:28 AM |
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 Angels
This is short, i was just walking home from school with no apparent inspiration and this just kinda popped into my head:
I realised,
I was born on clouds,
I was raised by angels,
And was dropped on...
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| Forum: Poetry For Review 06-02-2006, 09:47 AM |
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| Forum: Poetry For Review 05-08-2006, 03:36 PM |
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yeah
but thats why its so good, because u wrote it in a rush
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| Forum: Short Stories For Review 05-08-2006, 03:05 PM |
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yeah
10 pages is good none of us really write stories though, or at least not the ones i've read, they're more ideas, or beginnings...for a whole short story it could twenty pages, i'm not sure, see with...
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| Forum: Short Stories For Review 05-08-2006, 06:08 AM |
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 The Goblin Queen
(my spelling is more than terrible so please excuse it, feel free to correct me...i wont yell, promise, thanxs)
I have an idea for a story, i play parts of it in my head like a movie so as i can get...
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| Forum: Poetry For Review 05-07-2006, 10:16 AM |
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hehe
i'll drink to that!
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| Forum: Poetry For Review 05-07-2006, 06:07 AM |
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| Forum: Poetry For Review 05-07-2006, 06:03 AM |
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thank u
hey isis you were nice, i like your advice and its a lot softer, i can think on t with ut hating you, thats what i love abot wtiters, we're so versatile..well maybe not me but oh well..
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| Forum: Poetry For Review 05-05-2006, 11:50 AM |
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Dedicated to swissmochafudge
Hating you has never been so easy,
And loving the torment of your words makes hell delicious,
I'm voluptuous,
Like my body,
Heavy set with soft curves,
And a hidden kind of beauty,
That you,
Can not...
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| Forum: Poetry For Review 05-05-2006, 11:20 AM |
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i said i was sorry!!!! hello....
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| Forum: Poetry For Review 05-05-2006, 08:55 AM |
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Shows over
The aplauds die,
And the curtain opens,
The children scream,
And the adults sigh,
The lady is showered with roses,
And she bathes in their thorns,
And I...
I just stand amidst the caos,
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| Forum: Poetry For Review 05-03-2006, 01:08 PM |
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'Mind forged manicles'-William Blake
I'm counting my blessings,
Twenty pence...fifty pence...minus 72...
Minus two i'm on now,
And i'm counting,
I'm not grieving,
Or sighing,
Complaining,
Or craving,
For some choice words of...
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| Forum: Poetry For Review 05-03-2006, 08:52 AM |
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the imagary is confusing me, but i like it because of that so i suppose its cool
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| Forum: Poetry For Review 05-03-2006, 08:49 AM |
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yea, empty would make a good title...i love the poem, hypocritical in its own way and fantastic in another...i like this more than the last one i read
stay cool
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| Forum: Poetry For Review 05-03-2006, 08:46 AM |
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k, i read it once and it sounded good but had no rhythm, but that was cool cuz u sed u weren't big on it, i read it a second time and read it like it was someone talking, there's this type of poetry...
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| Forum: Poetry For Review 05-02-2006, 08:55 AM |
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| Forum: Poetry For Review 05-02-2006, 08:53 AM |
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thats disgusting
ohhh yuck....people keep saying dentists....i just get one hell of a kiss...sounds like you're making out dirty....tell me i'm not the only one who thought that....funny thing is i like it...thats so...
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| Forum: Poetry For Review 05-02-2006, 08:39 AM |
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 Any IDEAS PLZ???
The light dims and fades behind a solitary cloud,
And i wonder why i wore sandals...my feet are freezing,
I look around at the empty class room,
Out the window,
Or,
I try to,
Because i can see rails...
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| Forum: Poetry For Review 05-02-2006, 06:10 AM |
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i dunno...rea i
The light dims and fades behind a solitary cloud,
And i wonder why i wore sandals...my feet are freezing,
I look around at the empty class room,
Out the window,
Or,
I try to,
Because i can see rails...
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| Forum: Poetry For Review 05-01-2006, 01:48 PM |
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hey oblivion, you always say that...ALL my poems can't be spectacular...tht would b silly...
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| Forum: Poetry For Review 04-27-2006, 01:49 PM |
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ok
it means well i'm sure...ok let me give u a taste of ure own medicine-
The presentation needs work for me, it made it hard to grasp the beat of it, the imagary was great but the ideas were...
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