the way i feel
 

the way i feel

I hate myself I want to die
The problem is I don’t know why
Something is missing in my life
But until I find it where’s the knife
Too open my flesh too free my soul
Or maybe I’ll just smoke another bol

dude, that's not the way to kill yourself. Forced Rhyming without any of my friends

; . , -- . As a poet, they become your friend. =)

i thought the poem was good, gloomy, but good, the rhyming didnt seem forced to me

Spelling is cool! S-P-E-L-L-I-N-G! Yaaaay Spelling!

Also, as a poet you're supposed to invoke emotion take people to places they haven't been before, or show them that you can relate. I don't think anyone feels the way that poem says because it basically makes a joke out of that helpless restless feeling of "Life Over. Meaningless Existence" and we've all been there so to write a poem on that topic, you must feel it through your core.

This is a pretty sorry excuse for that. Try again next time :)

Yes at one time or another we have all felt this way, but I can really realate
to it. I think your poems,although short, are meaningful

"There is always light even in the darkest of nights"







- Skyfire