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nyumegs 04-05-2005 12:27 PM

Don't Know if It's Any Good
Okay, so here's the prob:
I've been working on this story for about a year. It'll be just about 200 some pages if it was in book form. I'm on my third revisal and I think it's good, but I have no idea if anyone else would like it! Can you tell me if it sounds good? I'll give you the basic gyst:
So there's these six girls: Sam, Rae, Nolee, Honey, Daisy and Mari (who tells the story) They are all foster children, living in an abusive home. Daisy is pregnant, so everyone wants to get her out of there. They run away by stealing their foster dad's car. Along the way, they meet Andrew and Mona, a woman and her son who give them help. Mari and Andrew get engaged before they move on to their final destination: New York. Between Andrew's farm and NYC, they work at a soda fountain, perform at a talent contest, etc. Then, they finally reach NYC and get jobs and an apartment (Honey turned 18 over the trip)During this time, Andrew and Mari are having a long-distance relationship. He is building her a house and she promises to come home to him when the house is done. Also, Nolee and Mari have always looked alike, but have never known if they are twins, so they are on a road to discovering their true identities. Finally, Daisy has the baby, the Social Services catch up with them and they are going ot be sent back to their evil foster dad. Mona, Andrew's mom, volunteers to take them though and they move in. It's pretty much good from there...ya know, the baby growing, Andrew and Mari in love, and Nolee and Mari meeting their birth mom.
Sound good? Let me cuz I want to show someone (like a publishe) and see if they like it....you can always e-me at [removed by admin];)

Jaida 04-29-2005 01:21 PM

Sounds great
I have also wirtten a 200 saome page book. yours spounds really good. If you want I can read it adn help you revise it. I give you all rights incase you think I might steal it or soemthing. I will not I am jsut so into reading originals. Just let me know and mabye we can work something out!?!

nyumegs 05-02-2005 11:18 AM

muchos gracias!!
Thanks for responding! I have the story at home on a disk...i'll try to post it up here and when I get it up I'll let you know
you can always email me at s 2816 @ psdschools.org (no spaces, of course) I'm glad somebody actually wants to respond!

Jake251 05-10-2005 02:43 PM

yeah it sounds great! ;)

xXxTigerEyesxXx 05-26-2005 05:21 AM

I think I love you... but what a I so afraid of?
...Sorry for the title! LOL! That song was stuck in my head *inocently smiles*

(NOTE to nyumegs: I signed on, just so I could post this! But I think it was a good thing, because now I can get my fluffy,
pink explorer hat on, and do some exploring here! Hehe!) :p

Okay, down to buisness...

I think your story sounds GREAT! and I would love to recive it! okay here it is:

all you type in is missyberghman and I'm @yahoo.com (I hope that works!)


Maddie 09-21-2005 11:51 PM

Good luck with getting it published! :)
Send a killer query letter!

Oblivion 12-07-2005 03:46 PM

sounds great,
be sure to tell us if it gets published, i wanna read it

runnerkgirl 12-07-2005 10:40 PM

It sounds really good
wow. you make me want to read the story really bad. I would love to read it and give you feed back as well. e me @ lemurlover14 and its @mchsi.com.

i have a story posted on the long term board if any one would be willing to cheack it out.


I love green!!!:bigsmile:

trackfan32 03-06-2006 11:47 AM

i think the book is fantastic for a first, i'm also writing my first book i'll write a thread and see what you think.:)

dare2dream319 03-22-2006 12:50 AM

yea.. I think it sounds great.. I love to write but i just dont feel like I am any good.... I need some tips!!!

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